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Genre: canon/Jack’s POV
Warnings: canon, no dead!Jack though
Disclaimer: Ennis and Jack were not created by me, but by Annie E. Proulx. No infringements or disrespects intended.


It was the kiss that had ruined everything.

Rough hands smoothing his back.
That feeling of unsatisfied need that made Jack tremble every time.
All the heavy panting, the hot puffs of air on his nape, followed by the welcome burning sensation and the initial sharp pain.
A shaky breath.
And relief filling every fiber of his body.
The pain that turned into pleasure as the movements grew more and more frantic behind him, bringing him closer, closer to the place where he wanted to be.
Then a grunt, and with his eyes still shut Jack shuddered: and it was just like usual, it was like always, like it had always been.
Like it had to be.

Jack’s breath slowed down as he let himself fall on the mattress, rolling onto his back, his sweaty hair sticking to his forehead.

And then, right then, a hand reached out for him, gently stroking his cheek, and two lips brushed a soft kiss against his temple.
The bubble that had kept any rational thought out of Jack’s mind exploded.
So much tenderness.

Something that Ennis would probably never do.

No matter how hard Jack tried, it seemed that reality always found a way to sneak up on him- and sometimes it was just too hard to deal with.

He had said no kisses.
It had been that fucking kiss.

Date: 2009-09-29 08:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]

Very well written!! Thanks, B!

Hugs, Steffi

Date: 2009-09-30 03:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Like always, thanks to you for reading, dear. :)


Date: 2009-09-29 09:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
so beautiful B, I love reading your writing it is always amazing.

I hope you had a good day.

lots of love,


Date: 2009-09-30 03:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I hope you had a good day too, honey, and I'm glad you liked this!!

Much love to you and your baby boy!! ♥


Date: 2009-09-29 10:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
As anyone ever told you that you are damn good at writing :)

Liked it very much :)

Date: 2009-09-30 03:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
*lol!* I am glad you liked it! Even though even this time it wasn't from Ennis's POV... Hmm, I should try that too, sooner or later...

Tight hugs!!


Date: 2009-09-29 10:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Mm... I haven´t read all you´ve written G, but there has been some major development since your first story. This was good! Not saying the first one sucked, lol! ;-)

Hugs ya!

Date: 2009-09-30 03:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
((Anna!)) :)

How are ya doing hon??
I was thinking about you a couple of days ago, you'd seemed a little more quiet than usual... Then I saw an update about... mmm, a vampire book? A vampire slash book maybe? ;)
Anyway I hope you're ok!!

I'm glad you liked it.
And oh, I wouldn't take no offence if you said the first one sucked btw *giggles*

Love ya!


Date: 2009-09-30 12:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
My sweet, sweet girl, this was absolute perfection! Just gorgeous and heartbreaking, the way good canon should be. Wow! Well done!

Date: 2009-09-30 03:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]

Thank you honey!
I'm happy you liked it, it means a lot said by you, cause you know I love your writing! :)

Hope you'r ok hon!

*hugs and love!!*


Date: 2009-09-30 05:27 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] chamilet
Sad, but good:)

Date: 2009-09-30 03:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thanks Chamilet! I'm happy you liked it, thanks for leaving a comment! :)



Date: 2009-09-30 05:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh Jack- sigh
very good drabble

Date: 2009-09-30 03:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thanks a lot dear Paula! :)

Wish you a good day!



Date: 2009-09-30 05:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Interesting. ♥

Date: 2009-09-30 03:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh, I'm glad you thought it was.
It was a little different from usual for me.

Thanks for your comment- it's also very appreciated!

*many hugs*



Date: 2009-09-30 06:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
First of all, knowing how bad "afraid of tomorrow" feels, I do hope your tomorrow goes (went?) well after all. At the very least it is over in 24 hours.
Second, the beautiful way you write how Jack is (almost) coping makes me sure that you can find a good way to cope yourself.
Third, *thank you* for giving *my* day a good start. I can't manage to read as much as I wished or used to, but I count myself lucky that I happened here.

Re: Coping

Date: 2009-09-30 03:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
The worst part of 'tomorrow' is over, thank you.
I made it out alive after all! :)

Aww, thank you for your comment.
It makes me so happy when readers can like what I write to the point of saying that I 'made their day'.
*You* saved one of my otherwise quite bad days, my dear!

Thank you!

*big hugs*

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Date: 2009-09-30 03:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Hi babe! ♥
I'm glad you liked it!

Yeah, kiss=love most of the time, isn't it?
I have to say I was thinking about Jack/Randall the first time I thought about this, but then I realized it really could be Jack/... whatever, maybe some guy in Mexico.
Who knows?

Quite sad thinking about it, but I was in a canon-mood for a couple of days.

*big hugs darlin'!*


Date: 2009-09-30 10:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Exceptionally well written - the title is just so apt.

Thank you

Date: 2009-09-30 03:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you very much to you, Lorna.
I'm glad you liked reading it.



Date: 2009-09-30 12:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
It took me a couple of times reading this through to really understand it (because I'm soooo thick, not because of your writing). You packed a punch here, and I like it. Really good canon, B! :)

Hope you're not afraid any more.


Date: 2009-09-30 03:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Like I said the worst part of 'tomorrow/today' is over! (Damn but school can be so scary *lol!* I had a test that... well, it coul've gone better *rolls eyes*)

Oh, don't worry. I re-read it for a while, trying to understand if it could be clear enough without giving too much away, not so easy to do when it was so clear in my head from the very start.

I hope you're ok, honey.
Oh, and yay for Joanne's book! :)

Love ya!


Date: 2009-09-30 12:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Although I know your writing well enough by now to have anticipated that from the first line Jack wasn't with Ennis, this really packs punch! You go girl!

Afraid of tomorrow? Yikes! I hope the day is almost over for you now! And I hope it was better than expected!

Love ya,


Date: 2009-09-30 03:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh, so strange to have someone saying she knows my writing so well, *lol!*

You clever thing... ;)

Oh, I thought it was easy enough to tell though, but I don't know, maybe because I knew it already, of course.

Day's almost over... 'twas more or less like I was expecting it to be!

Love ya back!


Date: 2009-09-30 07:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Your writing is wonderful! Sad but so moving! LOVED IT!!! XOXO

Date: 2009-09-30 09:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you dear! :) If you loved it I'm happy. ♥


Date: 2009-10-01 02:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Well done.
Thank you!

Date: 2009-10-01 04:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you, HT! ♥



Date: 2009-10-01 12:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
oh yeah, so jack huh
he had said no kisses ... :(
heartbreaking, you bet :(
thanks for sharing, i really liked this one

Date: 2009-10-01 06:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
He had said no kisses sounded so sad to me, too. :(
Thank you for reading, Vane, I hope you are ok darling.



Date: 2009-10-03 12:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
i'm fine, thanks giulia :)
hope you're fine too

Date: 2009-11-03 07:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I just discovered you! What a great piece of writing this is. I think it absolutely captures Jack's dilemma; how do you satisfy physical needs but avoid emotional ties when you're separated from the one person you love? I would love to know about this invisible person Jack's with!


Date: 2009-11-05 08:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you so much for leaving a comment here, Janie, it means a lot to me. I'm very glad you liked it. :)
I was thinking about Randall when I wrote this piece, but then I realized that it could be anyone- maybe a guy in MExico, who knows?

Many hugs to you!

Date: 2009-11-14 03:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Nice to see you, Janie.
Love & hugs

Date: 2009-11-03 08:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
oh this was great! thanks so much for posting this

Date: 2009-11-05 08:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you SO much for reading Linda! I love comments. :)


Date: 2009-11-04 04:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
OMG, you had me going there - wonderful writing but it sure makes me a little sad - Thanks. bob

Date: 2009-11-05 08:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you very much, Bob, I love to hear from readers and I'm very happy you liked this piece. :)
Thanks for letting me know!

Have a good day,

Date: 2009-11-14 04:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Wonderful one shot, dear :)
I'm in love with your prose. The way you evoke Jack's inner turmoil is incredibly beautiful.
Like Janie said, I also think it captures Jack's dilemma: his heart will always be with Ennis, but he can't satisfy all his physical and emotional needs, and he's obviously torn.
Grazie di cuore,

Date: 2013-03-11 01:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I just happily stumbled on this for the first time...heartbreaking and sad and real, just the way I love my canon!

thanks very much.

Date: 2013-03-11 02:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Ditto what Morrobay said! Small and simple, but very very effective. Loved it :)
A x


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